Friday, April 30, 2010

No Excess Words

FLG mentioned this in the comments on Three White Leopards, but wants to emphasize this point.

Emily Hale writes:
Great paper title: "Mill Advocates for Freedom of Thought and Action in Order to Achieve Human Progress, Which Results in the Most Effective Government."

As you know, FLG hates "in order to":
Better than Great paper title: "Mill Advocates for Freedom of Thought and Action to Achieve Human Progress, Which Results in the Most Effective Government."

But then we can also get rid of for:
Better than Better than Great paper title: "Mill Advocates Freedom of Thought and Action to Achieve Human Progress, Which Results in the Most Effective Government."

We could probably whittle that down even more, but then FLG'd would start changing words. Once he gets into that it's more a question of personal taste. Omitting unnecessary words isn't.

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